Chello!
Looking good. I've read Ch. 1 and the first part of ch. 2.
One teensy nitpick. Not being snarky; this is just my US Army experience talking and the fact that I've taught history for three semesters at the university level.
Watch out for passive voice in "official" memos. That just glares out at me like a mugatu on Capella.
Specifically the line "an increasing number of occurrences have been happening near the Federation-Klingon border" is better rendered as "an increasing number of incidents have occurred near the Federation-Klingon border." It doesn't matter that "incidents" is used again in the next sentence; in fact, that's great. Once the military mind settles on a term like "incident" it'll use it over and over again to hammer the point home.
I haven't noted any passive voice in the Captain's Log yet, but if it is there, that's fine. While it is an official log, it's a vocal one and people use passive voice all the time vocally. It just looks out of place in a military memo at the command level.
Sorry to sound pedantic. I really am enjoying this, though.
Anthony N. Emmel, M.A.
Learned Scholar & Catholic Gentleman
U.S.S. Victory NCC-1760
"England expects that every man will do his duty."